11-10-2015 10:05 PM
11-10-2015 10:05 PM
WOW! Fantastic. I don't really know what bipolar affective disorder is but the images in poem are strong and potent. Loved the 'ghost ship' in a vast sea - seems to say alot. From your words, symbols and images guess you are painting a very vivid painting of you living with the "label' but (for me) it goes way beyond the 'LABEL' - Thanks for your honesty and art. I liked the image as well (moon). Has inspired me to write!
Stan 🙂
11-10-2015 10:14 PM
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12-10-2015 12:10 AM
12-10-2015 12:10 AM
Reading MoonGal's brilliant poem on living...inspired me to write - a poem about 'living' 'thinking differently (for want of better words - but I hate the word SZ - even the sound is ugly!
The summer sun.
Clouds so high in the summer sky, watch them drift along.
Sound so silence of the morning dew,
I watch it from my room.
Only time is ticking by,
Clouded in a darkened sky.
Summer sky on a sunny breeze, watch it float away.
Darkness slips from my mind.
Oh, what a beautiful day.
One fine day lightning strikes,
And blows it all away.
Skies will burn a shade of white.
Until that time enjoy your life,
Don't listen to what they say.
Summer sky on a sunny breeze, watch it float away.
Darkness slips from my mind
Oh what a beautiful day.
All the shadows in my mind has gone so far away.
Watch our bird floating free,
No cares to shed a tear.
Bit by bit the summer sun slips from here.
Summer sky on a sunny breeze, watch it float away.
Darkness slips from my mind.
Oh, what a beautiful day.
When the lightning strikes again,
Does it paint your name?
Until that time I live just fine,
And release all that was mine.
Underneath the summer sky.
Summer sky on a sunny breeze, watch it float away.
Darkness slips from my mind
Oh what a beautiful day.
I know the cold winter comes,
The sky will turn grey.
Until that time the summer sun,
Will wash away my tears
and bring a brighter day.
Summer sky on a sunny breeze, watch it float away.
Darkness slips from my mind.
Oh, what a beautiful day.
I have been living under a sky is so dark,
Are cold and lonely sky.
I know the sun will come out,
And wash away all doubts.
The sun will dry my tears,
Blue skies to free my fears.
Summer sky on a sunny breeze, watch it float away.
Darkness slips from my mind,
Oh, what a beautiful day.
Clouds in the summer sky, watch them drift along.
Sounds so silent of the morning dew,
I watch it from my room.
Only time is ticking by,
Clouded in a darkened sky.
Summer sky on a sunny breeze, watch it float away.
Darkness slips from my mind.
Oh, what a beautiful day.
Stan.
12-10-2015 07:31 AM
12-10-2015 07:31 AM
This is kinda in a sorta way how it is when I'm not doing so good. Pleasse excuse the chaotic structure, language - after writing it, then reading I'm not sure words are enough..but else have we?
Talking in cryptic phrases.
Impression his coffee had grown cold.
I was cold.
It was obvious
A secret dance.
Fragments conspiracy.
Electric current pass
the class
mental sense all.
mercilessly mere patient.
pull the trigger there was no choice.
She smiled, and whisked herself out.
Scooted off to another room
your time is coming.
Soothing smooth tone.
Soul contaminator
isolated
sterile.
Cell totally bewildered.
Fat chance voice.
Electronic connections to the machines
Flashing electrical interference patterns.
Power to defuse my molecules
Mega vitamins.
Felt enlightenment
Using transcending powers .
This is the core of reality.
Falling through dimensional space
Inner peace I want to talk to you.
Do you hear voices too?
I smiled and shook my head.
Stan
12-10-2015 08:04 AM
12-10-2015 08:04 AM
12-10-2015 10:13 AM - edited 12-10-2015 10:25 AM
12-10-2015 10:13 AM - edited 12-10-2015 10:25 AM
@stan - beautiful, this 'thinking differently' which is what defines our daily lives. I love your exploration of the sky, weather... it really is like that isn't it. Even thogh we may have different 'diagnoses" we all to a greater or lesser degree living life thinking differently from the majority of people, although every one struggles, not just us. (I have to be careful to not have a case of "terminal uniqueness!").
Poetry lets us out of the strictures and bondage of structered thought and sentences and gives us ways of expressing our inner world, it does in its own right have structure, and rhyming is just one type of structure. I rarely use rhyming anymore in my poems because it in itself binds us to a way of thinking, searching for the "rhyming word" rather than the word that expresses the moment with clarity (although rhyming CAN do that too if done well such as your wonderful Summer Sun poem).
I like it that I 'think differently' it is the hallmark of me.
I am glad my poem was a stepping stone into your lovely poem too.
12-10-2015 10:23 AM
12-10-2015 10:23 AM
@stan - the 'red' writing appears to be/is stream of concsiousness (stream of fragmented thinking) stuff, i wonder if when you are travelling well whether this could be the bare bones of a poem that you write around the lightening strikes of these thoughts... weaving the snippetts into a coherent whole. Having a play with it... to turn it into poetry could be a lovely challenge.
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